Tuesday, August 29, 2017

Week 2 Story: Jackson and his Coach

I have written a story in my own word based on a story from the week 2 Anthology readings. 



Week 2 Story: Jackson and His Coach

There once was a kid that had just joined a college golf team. His name was Jackson and he was very excited to be on the team and be apart of a group. He was a very good golfer but was very bad about time management and late to a lot of things. One morning for workouts he over slept his alarm and missed his 7 o'clock workouts. Whenever the coach asked him about how the workouts went he was faced with a predicament about whether he should lie about missing or just tell him it went great. He decided to tell his coach that the workouts went good rather than just tell him the truth. He didn't want to disappoint his coach in his first week of being on the team so he decided one lie about missing would be better than telling his coach he already missed the first workout. As time went on in his first semester he continually missed different classes, appointments, and workouts and the lies continued to add up. Each time he missed something he would lie to cover his tracks and the pile of lies added up continuously. Finally the coach started to catch on to Jackson's lies and set him up for a trap. He scheduled a workout early in the morning for the team and decided to come to this workout. Jackson of course didn't come in the morning as he decided to sleep in, that after noon coach confronted Jackson.

"Jackson how was the workouts this morning??" said Coach

"they were great coach one of our best all year!!" exclaimed Jackson

"if they were so great then why weren't you there?" questioned Coach

Jackson knew he was caught and broke down in front of his coach.

"I'm sorry coach I shouldn't of lied but I just didn't want to disappoint you" said Jackson

"You lying to me is the biggest disappointment of all" said coach


Jackson ended up getting kicked off the team because the coach could not trust him and whether or not he was telling the truth. Jackson being deceitful ended up being the death of him.




(the gym where Jackson was supposed to be working out)

gym picture


This story is similar the the crane and the crab because just like the crane who lied to the fish. Jackson lied to his coach and ended up getting the death sentence in the end whenever he ended up getting caught. This shows how it is always better to just tell the truth rather than going behind peoples back and lying.


"The Cunning Crane and the Crab" from The Giant Crab, and Other Tales from Old India by W. H. D. Rouse. web source

3 comments:

  1. That was an interesting story to read, I could really see where it was going from the start and how it was similar to the crane story with the lies. It sounds like this may be more fact than fiction and there was probably a real Jackson. If that is the case I think the coach made a good decision by kicking him off the team because its part of the commitments of being on the team. Good story.

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  2. I can definitely see that sports are something you hold close to your heart and take great inspiration from based on your story and introduction. Teamwork, initiative, and effort are important traits not only for members of sports teams but for everyone in general. Your Jackson character definitely lacked all of that if he chose to lie and continue his downward spiral. I can see you totally incorporating those ideals in future stories because of your sports experience!

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  3. I love seeing sports and your love for golf in your stories! It makes them unique and fun to read. That being said, I think there are so many fun ways you could work golf puns into titles, or add some suspense into your stories with some golfing action! The possibilities are endless and I can't wait to see what you do with them!
    One thing I will say is that there are a few grammatical/typing errors, but nothing that hinders understanding of the story.

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